Oceans (DJzAIKz)[03/04/2012]

[Vote4DJz]

Song Name: Oceans
Artist Name: Shiki
Permission: Artist on TS

See Above with the mp3

Stepcloud:
b- http://thirdstyle.com/stepcloud/play/1426
e- http://thirdstyle.com/stepcloud/play/1427
m- http://thirdstyle.com/stepcloud/play/1428
h- http://thirdstyle.com/stepcloud/play/1429

[Nocturne]

No mp3 File. Autorejected. Keep track of your stuff before you submit.

[Vote4DJz]

ill edit attachment

[kisler]

And of course resolving that required so much effort. (I didn't touch the offset on this.)

Oceans-Shiki(DJzAIKz).zip

[Vote4DJz]

reed is that with the mp3?

[kisler]

Yes, I just downloaded it from SoundCloud and added it in.

[ichliebekase]

Reed, calm down. It's not our responsibility to get everything for someone else's file put together, especially if they are capable of posting in the first place for themselves. And it isn't even the issue of bias towards DJ, we would have done the same thing to any one else.

DJ, just please remember to put your mp3 in the file next time. It's your stepfile, your responsibility.

[kisler]

Reed, calm down. It's not our responsibility to get everything for someone else's file put together, especially if they are capable of posting in the first place for themselves. And it isn't even the issue of bias towards DJ, we would have done the same thing to any one else.

Ahaha sorry, I keep forgetting he can post here even though I'm even talking with him in the thread. Oh well, a half minute saved for him. It's now a proper submission.

e: To better explain myself, if any easily fixable submission issues come up like this in an email, I just fix them myself before uploading.

[ichliebekase]

OP is fully updated with correct .zip

[Halogen-]

(T) Technique - sim author's skills in pattern manipulation
(S) Sync - offset, BPM shifts, no misrhythms (obvious errors)
(I) Interpretation/Expression - creativity and imagination in translating the music, evoking meaningfulness in the file
(E) Engagement - fun, replayable and shows no signs of dragging the player along
(F) Flow - matching scales/chord progression, proper structure to the file, good transitions


KEY:

T/S/I/E/F/(A) = Technique/Sync/Interpretation & Expression/Engagement/Flow/(Additional deductions/additions)
optional notes and not required changes
Serious errors.
Additional deductions.
Minimum acceptance: 12/15

Oceans (DJzAIKz)
Beat 0 issue exists within this file. Otherwise, offset is fine.

Hard: 2/3/2/1/1/(0) [9/15]
- 0.030 to 8.388: quite a few scaling patterns -- being that you're following a synth that has a relatively solid rhythm, you can opt into following it with proper pitch, or you could distribute your patterns a bit better so that they are scattered. (Note: scattered doesn't mean random, make sure that there's still a noticeable structure.)
- 8.602: nice pattern. Makes sense with the music.
- 12.460 to 17.175: again, pretty scale-heavy patterns, which gets repetitive very quick. Try to vary your patterns a bit.
- 17.175 to 21.247: mini-jacks? I do understand the concept, but there's nothing repeating within the melody to merit that. Think about the melody in two levels - you have a melodic rhythm (which you're following correctly as 16ths), and the melodic structure (what you're attempting to follow with your patterns). Your chart is showing a melodic structure of something that repeats, but it's not there.
- 21.461: anchored pattern does not work here, unfortunately. The melody is actively changing, so you'll have to spread your patterns a bit more. Try to follow this with appropriate pitch if possible.
- 28.319: the anchor does work here, but you have it structured incorrectly, because the repeating note is on 4th/8th notes. In other words, you're going to want a huge 8th note jack set on red/blue arrows only.
- 30.891: jacks here aren't correct
- 31.748 to 40.535: scale heavy, but better than the introduction.
- at 40 seconds, this feels draggy. That's a serious problem at this length.

Medium: 2/3/1/1/1/(0) [8/15]
- long 8th streams, only relevant in areas that have anchored patterns (8.602 to 12.031/28.319 to 30.891)
- otherwise, patterns are fairly jumbled with no real relevance/structure
- 16th blips are an alright touch, but it doesn't make up for the rest of the file
- feels incredibly draggy

Easy: 2/2/1/1/1/(0) [7/15]
- quite a few freezes in here. Ask yourself a question - are most players playing this chart going to understand what the freezes are to, or are they going to have to assume what's being followed? If you've gone the assumption route, then your pattern isn't the most suitable choice.
- 12.031: 16ths? considering the fact that you're using freezes to accent 16th triplets, these are out of place.
- 21.461: why aren't there any notes here? you accent the entire running melody the first time. granted, the three taps do follow the low notes, but it does feel a bit erroneous
- 23.604: triplet, again
- 28.533: rhythm switch is a bit odd
- not much clarity between what's being accented

Beginner: 2/2/2/1/1/(0) [8/15]
first tap: 0.030; last tap: 40.320; length: 40.290; taps: 79; NPS: 1.96

- the rhythm in this beginner chart is actually somewhat creative in some spots
- there are many quarter note runs with no real attention to patterns, a bad thing for beginner charts
- 16.746: patterns like this are always great, though
- 24.461: use a different pattern, since you already used 13241324(etc)
- 28.533: this rhythm switch doesn't work well
- last quarter note run is really rough, with no real pattern distribution