{R} Tyrannical Machine (linebro) [11/10/2011]

[kisler]

Song Name: Tyrannical Machine
Artist: Sivak

175

[Nocturne]

I'm gonna be George today and use colors :D

Offset: Good. I'd make it 0.563, but you're only 1ms off, no big deal.

Hard:
-2.341 missing 16th here
-3.839, 4.588 see above
-18.535 the patterns here would be better as 4 note trill patterns. ([1][3][1][3]) then maybe ([2][4][2][4]) and change the patterns every half measure (every four 16th notes)
-24.339, 24.433, 24.536 There should be notes here, you end the stream three notes too early.
-27.148 you have a full measure of nothing, there should be something here for the little drum roll
-27.522 this pattern should be at 18.535. For this section i would make a 5 note staircase pattern ([1][2][3][4][2][4][3][2]) where [2] "down" is the 5th note (anchor point) that indicates the pattern should turn around and repeat the pattern backwards.
-36.517 this pattern right here up to the freeze is good, keep it.
-57.477 good pattern, this is what you should do for the pattern at 18.535, stay consistent and use the right patterns.
-Try to layering some of your streams with jumpstreams like the pattern on 18.535 could use a jump on every other 4th note.

Medium:
Too much like Hard, you need to underlayer a lot more. on the section like 6.553 try to not use 16ths between the jumps, its still hard. Also, make your streams easier. Break them up a little, the whole file is too hard in comparison to your actuall hard file, you need to easy it up a lot more.


Easy:
-some of the patterns repeated alot, but it was nice and easy.


Beginner:
-27.148 not sure why there's a note here.
-Also don't overuse the freezes, you only need them on notes when the sound is long, you used them on short sounds, take some freezes out, make them regular accordingly.



Verdict: Light Accept with Changes
-There song itself was really cool, till it repeats itself, then it just get boring since nothing builds-up or changes. The steps itself weren't bad, but they were pretty boring and the song didn't enforce how fun the file could have been, it's all my opinion though. Change up a few things and work on your medium file, you can make this a pretty sold file. Just needs a little work, mainly your medium file, then work on Hard, easy, and beginner. Make sure its all good and look through these notes. Not bad, but has room for much more potential.

[Housekeeper]

fix the pr in hard
medium is too difficult and feels too much like hard make it easier
change the left arrows in easy at m21
dont make everything holds in begginer and stay consistent throughout the chart

verdict: rejected but if u make fixes accepted :)